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Write about Your Job

Here is a paragraph written in response to the topic: Write about Your Job

My job offers many benefits. First of all, I have learned many useful skills at my job. I will be able to apply these skills when I move on to my future career. Also, my job is educational. For example, I have learned about the world of business and how companies succeed. On the personal level, my job has helped me overcome my shyness. As a matter of fact, I was pleased to discover that my job is a great place to meet women. Last and most important, my job has helped me learn to deal with the public. I will carry this skill with me both on the personal and the professional level. In conclusion, I have a perfect job to help me prepare for my future career.

Is the topic sentence supported with a sufficient amount of information?

Notice the paragraph is so general that readers have no idea where the writer works or what the position and duties are.

Here are 26 topic sentences about a job. Do you recognize any of these opinions posing as specific information in the example paragraph?

  1. My job is stressful.
  2. My job offers many benefits. (refers to pay, vacations, sick leave, health insurance, paid tuition)
  3. My job suits my lifestyle.
  4. My job is a great place to meet women (men).
  5. My job is challenging.
  6. My job involves hard physical labor.
  7. My job is demanding.
  8. My job can be dangerous.
  9. My work day is unpredictable.
  10. My job is educational.
  11. My job has helped me overcome my shyness.
  12. My job is boring.
  13. My job requires much training.
  14. My boss is mistreats employees.
  15. My boss cheats the public.
  16. My boss should be fired.
  17. Ellen should be fired.
  18. I should find a better job.
  19. I found my job through persistence.
  20. I lucked into finding my job.
  21. Customers at my job are easy to fool.
  22. Customers at my job are unreasonable.
  23. Working conditions at my job are unhealthy (or healthy).
  24. My job involves a variety of duties.
  25. Rules for employees where I work are too restrictive.
  26. I have a perfect job to help me prepare for my future career.

What is the point? Reasons are not information. Reasons usually are topic sentences. Here is a workable topic sentence outline for a theme about your job.

 

Thesis: My job as a vet tech has helped me prepare for a career in medicine.

Topic Sentence 1: I have benefited from valuable training in completing and interpreting medical reports and insurance forms.

Topic Sentence 2: I have acquired experience in maintaining a clinic and assisting in medical procedures.

Topic Sentence 3: I have learned how to understand and respond to client concerns about a medical problem

 Last updated 9/18/06

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